T1+Writing

__**Thursday 7th April 2011**__

__**WALT - write an argument using persuasive language features to convince people to visit the Bay of Plenty.**__

**Success Criteria** **My writing contains an introduction, 3 key arguments and a conclusion** **I will state and restate my opinion** **I use a range of language resources and punctuation** **My paragraphs follow the S E E structure** **.**

=__**Why people should come to the BOP.**__ = = = =**Are you thinking about coming to New Zealand? Well if you are then come to the sunny Bay Of Plenty! Not only that it is sunny but there are a lot of things to do here, here are my reasons to persuade you to come and vist!** = =**There are a range of things you can do in the Bay Of Plenty. The Maori culture is one of them and it is a great way to explain New Zealand and how it works. Maori culture in the Bay Of Plenty is very big and there are a lot of tribes here. One of the biggest things about Bay Of Plenty is the Maori culture and the Maori language is one component of this.** = = = =**You must come and listen to the legends of the Mountains in the Bay of Plenty. One in particular is called Mt Managanui and it has a Maori legend behind it. The legend is about how the Maori tribes used to fight the intruders away and to keep there land. They also would go and fight other tribes to get there land and become a bigger tribe. To fight the other tribes they had to stay up all night and be ready because they could be approached at anytime. So this is what they did... They got heaps of shells and put them around the sides of the mountain so the enemies couldn’t get up and they would get sore feet. The shell’s are still there so if you go to the mountain you will see the shell’s.** = = = =**Maori is a cool language to learn and you can learn it anywhere in the Bay Of Plenty! If you ask someone in New Zealand how to say hello in Maori you will get the answer Kia ora! Maori is not only used for talking you also can sing Maori and this is called a Waiata. When you are here you can watch the cultural groups perform their waiata (song) and haka (dance).** = =**Maori food (Kai) is yummy food and when you get to the Bay Of Plenty you will probably have a Hangi which is food cooked under ground in a steamer and it usually takes three to four hours. The food in a hangi is kumara, potato, pumpkin, chicken, pork, mutton, stuffing and steam pudding. It is delicious and you have to try it!** = = = =**So now I know that you want to come to the Bay Of Plenty and learn about the maori culture which includes the maori legends, maori language, waiata, haka and maori kai. See you soon!** = = = = Taylah, you haven't really given me enough to convince me to come to the BOP. You have spoken only about the Maori Culture and nothing specific about BOP. You need to make sure you focus your ideas and they relate to your topic. You need 3 main reasons to make your argument strong and you really only have one. You have paragraphed your ideas correctly, which is great to see. You use personal pronouns well and are beginning to use stronger imperatives to help convince me. Your writing is developing well, you just need to think through your content. = = Miss Crone :) =